Everybody is good, my Chinese name is Chen Yinuo, my English name is lina. I come from China zhejiang jinhua yiwu xiang shan primary school, is a primary school student, is also a big DuiWei school. I"m thirteen years old, height 1.6 meters, I am a lively lovable girl, I am beautiful, sunshine, warm, generous, perfect is a good girl, I am the sun bright, happy every day. I live in a happy family, there are three in my family, my father, mother and me, I love my mom and dad and my family. My achievement is very good, Chinese, maths, English, science, are leading the way in all the subjects, I"m very proud for that. My teacher is a good helper, students good example, I unity, friendly,() positive, the students are willing to make friends with me, so I have many friends, I feel very happy. Would you like to make friends with me?
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Hello, everyone, my Chinese name is Chen Yinuo, and my English name is Lina. I come from Yiwu of Zhejiang. I study in Xiangshan primary school. I"m thirteen years old and 1.6 meters in height. I am a lovely girl. I live in a happy family. There are three people in my family, my father, mother and me. I love my family. At school, I work hard and do well in Chinese, Math, English, and Science. My parents are very proud of me. My teachers are kind and generous, and often help me with my study. I am a warm-hearted and friendly girl, so the students are willing to make friends with me. I have many friends at school, and I feel very happy with them. Would you like to make friends with me?
修改老师：Crystal 老师
六年级:陈一诺
